Without You

from JoeUser Forums
Recently I had a pretty bad arguement with my girlfriend. After we kissed and made up, I wrote this poem to her. It's short, but I hope you all enjoy it.

What is speech without words?
What is sight without light?
What is touch without hands?
What is love, without you?
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Reply #1 from JoeUser Forums Top
Awww...how sweet of you Alex.

~carebear~
Reply #2 from JoeUser Forums Top
I try.

Poetry is a hobby. Helps relieve stress.

They need a Poetry blog classification.

Peace,

Beebes
Siege of Centauri
Reply #3 from JoeUser Forums Top

They need a Poetry blog classification.


There's a group called anti-prose.joeuser.com that you can post under. 


 

Reply #4 from JoeUser Forums Top
that's really cute, I bet she ate it up!
Reply #5 from JoeUser Forums Top
That is nice. I'm going to go out on a limb here, though, and say that for the sake of visual aesthetics you should put a comma before the 'without' in all four lines. The last line doesn't need to give itself away like that; a little extra subtlety is preferred.
Reply #6 from JoeUser Forums Top
Hmmm...

That extra comma isn't in the original version. It's probably a typo on my part, but I see what you are saying.

Thanks!

Peace,

Beebes
Reply #7 from JoeUser Forums Top
extra subtlety is preferred.


but he already has her, he doesn't need to be subltle or aesthetically correct!!! That's love! it follows no norm!!
Reply #8 from JoeUser Forums Top
Well, aren't you just sweet?...hehe...You did good....although I didn't even though you had a fight....always looked like you were getting along to me.....

~Zoo
Reply #9 from JoeUser Forums Top
Alex,

i love the poem, it is beautiful. I love you to death!!!!

Yours,
Sam
Reply #10 from JoeUser Forums Top
That is so beautiful...ya'll made up....*sniff*.....

~Zoo

(Hey, I'm actually being serious for once)
Reply #11 from JoeUser Forums Top
That was a good poem. Just remember you can make poems easy and make up easy to if you just express how you trully feel. Quote!

~blondelife~
Reply #12 from JoeUser Forums Top
Actually Shaun and Jess, we made up at band camp.

But thanks for the support.

I wrote this poem right after we had our big fight.

And Sam, even though I doubt you'll see this, I love you to death right back.

Peace,

Beebes
Reply #13 from JoeUser Forums Top
Man, you guys are so slow on the info! lol. I think you're like the only one who didn't know Shaun! Who do you get your info from? lol.

~carebear~
Reply #14 from JoeUser Forums Top
See, that's the thing Ash. Shaun doesn't get any info. He's more out of the loop than me!


Peace,

Beebes
Reply #15 from JoeUser Forums Top
Actually Shaun and Jess, we made up at band camp.


Yeah i already knew that you made up. Also alex go to my website and read an article it has to do with you.

~blondelife~
Reply #16 from JoeUser Forums Top
Well crap guys...I thought you had another "disagreement"....I kinda assumed that you made up at the band camp thing...but you're right...no one tells me anything.....damnit....

~Zoo
Reply #17 from JoeUser Forums Top
Well crap guys...I thought you had another "disagreement"....I kinda assumed that you made up at the band camp thing...but you're right...no one tells me anything.....damnit....


Awwww....poor Shaun, nobody tells him anything! Ok, how bout next time you get your info from different people! lol.

~carebear~
Reply #18 from JoeUser Forums Top
Awwww....poor Shaun, nobody tells him anything! Ok, how bout next time you get your info from different people! lol.


Well how about you tell me?....

~Zoo