I'm just a Child-you know.

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I turned my face from You
and now I see below the earth.
Nothing waits to find me alone
and tare my mask to shredded pulses
of the once beating heart.
Cold and shaking
with terror
with hope
with knowledge-that's the worst part.
I turned my face from You
and now I see below the earth.
Something raw has found me alone.
In the position of attention I stand to hear my fate.
Inside I am a child-you know?
Like yesterday...
when I played dress up in Father's boots.
I'm just a child, you know.
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Reply #1 from JoeUser Forums Top

Innocence lost, and the dreaded fear of punishment...not bad.

~Zoo

Reply #2 from JoeUser Forums Top
ah! quite the analyser aren't you? Very good indeed. But there's something more...
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Reply #3 from JoeUser Forums Top
But there's something more...


Well, I can't get everything everytime...

What did I miss?

~Zoo
Reply #4 from JoeUser Forums Top
Up until the child part it seemed like you had died.

"and now I see below the earth."

Something tells me this isn't what you were trying to say but it reminds me of something that someone would say who once was a christian but then left Christ and died. Now they're in hell waiting for their punishment. Because they didn't ever grow spiritually they died as a child of the kingdom who gave up their place.

Once being a Christian they already know:
1) what is to come ("knowledge")
2) that it is the worst fate possible ("terror")
3) that IF they could return to Christ that they MIGHT have a chance of avoiding their fate ("hope")

The something raw seems to be the most basic of something and in this case... evil or the devil.

I'm probably way off but that's what I got out of it. Costlow over and out!
Reply #5 from JoeUser Forums Top
I know religion is wrapped up in it...damned good breakdown by Costlow in that particular area. Kudos!

~Zoo
Reply #6 from JoeUser Forums Top
Something tells me this isn't what you were trying to say but it reminds me of something that someone would say who once was a christian but then left Christ and died. Now they're in hell waiting for their punishment. Because they didn't ever grow spiritually they died as a child of the kingdom who gave up their place.


Ah! Much much closer indeed! It's like you were in my head, Costlow!

) what is to come ("knowledge")2) that it is the worst fate possible ("terror")3) that IF they could return to Christ that they MIGHT have a chance of avoiding their fate ("hope")


Strangely enough, this is exactly what I was getting at. Wow. That is weird that you can do that. Weird.
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Reply #7 from JoeUser Forums Top
It's like you were in my head,


That might be the scariest place of all.

~Zoo
Reply #8 from JoeUser Forums Top
This stupid art class I'm taking has messed with my head. I likely would have originally just accepted it as a loss of innocence but I just HAD to try and dig a bit deaper... *sigh*
Reply #9 from JoeUser Forums Top

but I just HAD to try and dig a bit deaper...

I think college does that to people...especially arts, religion, and philosophy...but other classes promote interconnected thinking as well.  The world is a tapestry of meaning.

~Zoo

Reply #10 from JoeUser Forums Top
This stupid art class I'm taking has messed with my head. I likely would have originally just accepted it as a loss of innocence but I just HAD to try and dig a bit deaper... *sigh*


For once, I am very glad that something made you think lol! j/k : )
Most of my poems have two meanings. I like people to be able to take what they want out of it and relate it to themselves. I try to hid the true meaning better so that only me and those very close to me can understand them.
Reply #11 from JoeUser Forums Top
I try to hid the true meaning better so that only me and those very close to me can understand them.


You too? Hmm...

~Zoo
Reply #12 from JoeUser Forums Top
I'd like to think that I could pull that off as well but I'm still just a bit too much of a math geek so multiple meanings (gray areas) tend to sadden me a bit. i don't mind reading them or anything, I just don't like trying to write them out. it's not "me".
Reply #13 from JoeUser Forums Top
Brandon's a black and white kind of guy. No shades of grey for him.

~Zoo
Reply #14 from JoeUser Forums Top
Brandon's a black and white kind of guy. No shades of grey for him.


Oh I know a few shades of gray with Brandon...little ones but they are still there lol.

You too? Hmm...


I guess it's nice to find that we have that in common as well lol!
Reply #15 from JoeUser Forums Top
I guess it's nice to find that we have that in common as well lol!


We're like ogres, which are like onions, which are like cakes...they all have layers.

~Zoo