My Response to Kelly's Writing Challenge

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Here is my attempt at Kelly's Writing Challenge. Link


I like to thank Maso for the inspiration. Link


He:


Here I sit all wet

About a woman I rather forget

Don't want to sound too upset

Only wish we never met



Being stuck is a trial

Hate it here on this isle

Bitching isn't my style

But Hell I been here awhile



As I began to scream and wail

She showed up at my jail

And being I was a male

I was ready to set sail



But i didn't get my wish

Not even one little kiss

She disappeared like the mist

That f**king half fish



She:


Came upon this little land

With the most softest of sand

But before I could get a tan

I looked up and saw a man



He was very nice at first

But slowly his demeanor got worse

Thought his anger would burst

When he told me about his curse



He started to give me the eye

So I left him high and dry

Without so much as a bye

And I will tell you why



I seen how a tree grows

He was a kin of Pinocchio's

And damn I almost froze

When I seen it wasn't his nose
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Reply #1 from JoeUser Forums Top
funny, hon... Very cleverly written.
Reply #2 from JoeUser Forums Top
This was so good. I love the male perspective of this picture.

Very clever indeed.
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Reply #3 from JoeUser Forums Top
Hey Chris, I'm glad I inspired you to this. I dig the punchline, you clever sod. Well done

I asked in my blog if you got a copy of my CD. If not, let me know and I'll send you one.
Reply #4 from JoeUser Forums Top

AH!  A true masterpiece from the master of mirth! 

Thanks, it was fun to read and really clever!

Reply #5 from JoeUser Forums Top
In Bloom,
funny, hon... Very cleverly written.


Thanks, Hon. It's about time I written anything. It has been 5 months.   



Reply #6 from JoeUser Forums Top
Kelly W,
This was so good. I love the male perspective of this picture.

Very clever indeed.


Thank you so much. I was hoping my male view wasn't too juvenile.   

Reply #7 from JoeUser Forums Top
Maso,
Hey Chris, I'm glad I inspired you to this. I dig the punchline, you clever sod. Well done


Thanks, Mark. Since I can't write as beautiful as you I have to go with humor.   

I asked in my blog if you got a copy of my CD. If not, let me know and I'll send you one.


I would love a CD. I also wanted to send you a copy of a CD from Rose's brother. Maybe he could open up for you guys Down Under someday.



Reply #8 from JoeUser Forums Top
Doc,
AH! A true masterpiece from the master of mirth!

Thanks, it was fun to read and really clever!


Thank you, Doc. Like I told Maso, I'm just glad I finally wrote something. I been a tad lazy for a bit. I just hope it doesn't take another 5 months to write something else.   
Reply #9 from JoeUser Forums Top
Since I can't write as beautiful as you I have to go with humor


Thanks very much mate. I don't about 'beautiful' but I will take it anyway   

I also wanted to send you a copy of a CD from Rose's brother. Maybe he could open up for you guys Down Under someday.


Yes please... I would love to hear it. As for opening, maybe we can return the favour when we come to the States.

just hope it doesn't take another 5 months to write something else.


Me too...

Reply #10 from JoeUser Forums Top
Just saw this!

AH! A true masterpiece from the master of mirth!
Thanks, it was fun to read and really clever!


I gotta agree with Doc!   
Reply #11 from JoeUser Forums Top
Shovelheat,

I gotta agree with Doc!


Thanks, Shovel.

I wasn't sure about adding anything to a writing challenge. Some bloggers here are such talented writers. I like your style of writing, so you complimenting me just gives me confidence to try more. Thanks again.
Reply #12 from JoeUser Forums Top
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Reply #13 from JoeUser Forums Top
Thanks, Hon. It's about time I written anything. It has been 5 months.


I'll say!


I liked it, very funny and very clever! I'll have to go mosey around to see what the latest challenge is. [I've only been off line since Friday and I've not been on line for too long this week.]
Reply #14 from JoeUser Forums Top
I liked it, very funny and very clever! I'll have to go mosey around to see what the latest challenge is. [I've only been off line since Friday and I've not been on line for too long this week.]


Thanks, Donna. You should try the challenge. If my lazy ass can do it anybody can.

Don't stay off too long, and hurry back.